Don’t Be So…


Don’t be so… she started,Party2
then lost her way,
to random thoughts.

And upon returning
found him gone
as if those three words
were enough.

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14 Responses to Don’t Be So…

  1. Mauro Metallo says:

    A real gem: I love concise and meaningful thoughts, expecially if written in verse…

  2. davecandoit says:

    Thank you, Mauro. I’ll try not to.

  3. aswirly says:

    I keep coming back to this. So much unsaid makes it so powerful.

  4. davecandoit says:

    Thanks, I’ll add you to mine.

  5. y says:

    reminds me of this one i wrote recently: http://yichinglin.wordpress.com/2010/02/16/in-a-couple-of-weeks/

    as you may notice from the overall collection, i am the opposite – i find it easier to write more concisely than lengthily…(smile) thank you so much for sharing these!

    • davecandoit says:

      Boy that was a great poem. Nicely done. Me, I sometimes write very concise and then find I write long stuff. I usually over-write and then edit back to something more sharp.

      • y says:

        i, on the other hand, time myself, and write off-the-cuff. when i find that i’m going back to change too many of the words, i just slap my time stamp and move on – because that would be tomorrow’s writing entry (smile). shh, don’t tell anyone!

  6. davecandoit says:

    LOL, your secret’s safe with me.

  7. Vicki says:

    Nice Dave. I have a hard time writing long things. Funny that eh?

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